Many had unconnected orphan words stuck in the middle. Many sentences changed direction in the middle. Second, the book was supposedly edited by "Edit Queen." There being many grammar, spelling and punction errors too numerous to mention, I suspect that "Edit Queen" didn't do much proofreading past the first 10 pages or just scanned it. Then, he has millions of refugees migrating to -where? like Lemmings. These could have been condensed and placed at the beginning of the book to set the stage. Somewhat disruptive in the flow is the chapters leading off with a "radio broadcast" not really connected to the chapter or the plot flow.
While this is a new apocalyptic approach (in my wide reading), the plot seems to have a lot of events from other P-A books. The plot is based on a massive Midwest earthquake that disrupts the entire USA.
Some of the action and dialog is overly dramatic, almost Gothic. The plot moves along in fits and starts and reflects a neophyte writer.
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